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My thoughts about vaccine

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2021-12-20 2118

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The number of COVID-19 patients in Korea is increasing rapidly recently.
A few months ago, the Korean government increased the number of people gathered to 10 and expanded the opening hours of stores to 12 o'clock by adjusting the distance.
As a result, many events and meetings were held in a short period of time, and the number of confirmed COVID-19 cases increased.
A new virus called Omicron has also happened.
Last weekend again, the government strengthened distancing policy.
I also think that meetings should be restricted until the end of the year and the beginning of the year. And I think we need to strengthen the vaccine pass.
I think it is necessary to allow the people to get booster shots quickly, and vaccine vacations should also be expanded.

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Hi Evan:) 

It saddens me to hear that the number of COVID-19 patients in South Korea is continuously increasing. We also experienced the same thing. Hopefully, the government will think of an effective way to control the outbreak. Your suggestions are actually great. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

The number of COVID-19 patients in Korea is increasing rapidly recently.
>> CORRECT

A few months ago, the Korean government increased the number of people gathered to 10 and expanded the opening hours of stores to 12 o'clock by adjusting the distance.
>> 
A few months ago, the Korean government increased the number of people who can gather to 10 and expanded the opening hours of stores until 12 am by adjusting the social distancing.

As a result, many events and meetings were held in a short period of time, and the number of confirmed COVID-19 cases increased.
>> CORRECT

A new virus called Omicron has also happened.
>> CORRECT

Last weekend again, the government strengthened distancing policy.
>> Last weekend, the government strengthened distancing policy again. 

I also think that meetings should be restricted until the end of the year and the beginning of the year. And I think we need to strengthen the vaccine pass.
>> CORRECT

I think it is necessary to allow the people to get booster shots quickly, and vaccine vacations should also be expanded.
>> CORRECT
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