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My dream vacation

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My dream vacation is trip go to the Southeast Asia.
Usually vacation season, I have been Southeast Asia country for travel with my best friend.
2 years ago, I went Malaysia kotakinabalu.
It it my best memory of best.
I can't forget beautiful sea view and most best thing is take a rest in hotel.
Just in hotel, but it's different feeling at Korea.
I don't know reason, anyway my dream vacation is go to the trip other country.
My favorite places is Southeast Asia.

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Hi Ann:) 

Countries here in Southeast Asia are the best. The tourist spots are exquisite! I hope you can go here in the Philippines again. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

My dream vacation is trip go to the Southeast Asia.
>> CORRECT

Usually vacation season, I have been Southeast Asia country for travel with my best friend.
>> Usually I go to countries in the Southeast Asia with my bestfriend during vacation season. 

2 years ago, I went Malaysia kotakinabalu.
>> 2 years ago, I went to Kotakinabalu, Malaysia .

It it my best memory of best.
>>It is the best memory that I have. 

I can't forget beautiful sea view and most best thing is take a rest in hotel.
>> I can't forget the beautiful view of the sea and the best part is  resting in the hotel.. 

Just in hotel, but it's different feeling at Korea.
>> It may be just in a hotel but it has a different feeling compared to the ones in South kroea. 

I don't know reason, anyway my dream vacation is go to the trip other country.
>> I don't know the reason and still, my dream vacation is to go on a trip in another country.

My favorite places is Southeast Asia.
>> My favorite places are in Southeast Asia.

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