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What will be your New Year\'s Resolution this coming new year?

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My resolution of this coming new year is 'Let's be a good person.'.
I can't judge myself about me but I think I am not a bad person.
But I want to be a better person because I think I am not enough.
Actually, being a better person is one of the hardest things in this world.
We can all change but it is hard to change to a person who I want to be.
It is really hard to achieve, but it isn't impossible.
So I want to be a better person and also I want to make new friends.

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Hi John:) 

Being a good person is indeed hard but not impossible. This is actually a great resolution. All your good deeds will flourish. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

My resolution of this coming new year is 'Let's be a good person.'.
>> My resolution for this coming new year is to be a good person. 

I can't judge myself about me but I think I am not a bad person.
>> I can't define who I am by judging myself but I am not a bad person. 

But I want to be a better per
on because I think I am not enough.
>> CORRECT

Actually, being a better person is one of the hardest things in this world.
>> CORRECT

We can all change but it is hard to change to a person who I want to be.
>> CORRECT

It is really hard to achieve, but it isn't impossible.
>> CORRECT

So I want to be a better person and also I want to make new friends.
>> So I want to be a better person and I also want to make new friends.

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