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After my English class for two months, I found that my body and spiritual condition are exhausted. I need to recover them. So now I just want to take a rest. I don't regret my English grade and the situation that I have, because I did my best so far. But even though I did my best so far in my circumstance, my English is still poor. I feel don't know how to fill the void. I was expecting that when finished my English class, I will feel free but It was not. I realized that I have to recover my spiritual things. So, I ask God what I want me to do now. I want to act what God wants me to do. That's a way to go more faster and stable than the plan I have. Yesterday when I talked about my whereabouts to Faith, I was cried. She also was cried when I saw my tears. After our meeting, My feeling became very comfortable. Her tears make me was comforted. I always think that tear is a weakness but It's not. Praying of tear is strongest for recovery. I learned that through her tears. Thanks, Faith!!

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God understands your tears, God understands your fears, Jane! These are the lyrics of the song, "God Understands". This too shall pass!-Faith-
After my English class for two months, I found that my body and spiritual condition are exhausted. 
>> After my English class for two months, I feel that my body and spiritual conditions are exhausted. 
I need to recover them. 
>> CORRECT
OR I need to revive my physical and spiritual conditions.
So now I just want to take a rest. 
>> So now, I just want to take a rest. 
I don't regret my English grade and the situation that I have, because I did my best so far. 
>> I don't regret my English grade and the situation that I have because I did my best so far. 
But even though I did my best so far in my circumstance, my English is still poor. 
>> CORRECT
I feel don't know how to fill the void. 
>> I don't know how to fill the void. 
I was expecting that when finished my English class, I will feel free but It was not. 
>> I was expecting that when I finished my English class, I would feel free but It was not. 
I realized that I have to recover my spiritual things. 
>> I realized that I have to restore my spirit.
So, I ask God what I want me to do now. 
>> So, I ask God what He wants me to do now.
I want to act what God wants me to do. 
>> I want to act according to what God wants me to do. 
OR I want to behave according to God's will.
That's a way to go more faster and stable than the plan I have. 
>> That's the way to go faster and more stable than the plan I have. 
Yesterday when I talked about my whereabouts to Faith, I was cried. 
>> Yesterday, when I talked about my whereabouts to Faith, I cried. 
She also was cried when I saw my tears. 
>> She also cried when she saw my tears. 
After our meeting, My feeling became very comfortable. 
>> After our meeting, my feeling became very comfortable. 
Her tears make me was comforted. 
>> Her tears comforted me. 
I always think that tear is a weakness but It's not. 
>> I always think that shedding tears is a weakness but It's not. 
Praying of tear is strongest for recovery. 
>> Praying with tears is the strongest way for recovery. 
I learned that through her tears. 
>> CORRECT
Thanks, Faith!!
>> CORRECT
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