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I couldn't understand why many people prefer to study at cafe because its environment is not quite, many people enjoy their time by talking with each other. I wonder how people can focus on studying there. Some people say that it can be a chance to adapt the most terrible atmosphere but what if they study at home or in l a library, they can save their time and spend their free time to do what they like. Coffee market has been growing every moments. There were few people who enjoy drinking coffee at cafe, but it become normal drinking it after meals. We can easily see coffee shop anywhere and it's business has already became the most popular because it give a chance to make a lot of money. People willing to visit a cafe if it has a unique facility and food, even though, it's location is far from their residence. Now, I can understand a little bit why people want to do hopping. It is not a small business anymore, there are numerous well-made cafe around my country by running personal.

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I couldn't understand why many people prefer to study at cafe because its environment is not quite, many people enjoy their time by talking with each other.
>>> I couldn't understand why many people prefer to study at a cafe because its environment is not quiet. Many people enjoy their time by talking with each other.
 I wonder how people can focus on studying there.
>>>  I wonder how people focus on studying there.
 Some people say that it can be a chance to adapt the most terrible atmosphere but what if they study at home or in a library, they can save their time and spend their free time to do what they like. 
>>> CORRECT
Coffee market has been growing every moment. 
>>> CORRECT
There were few people who enjoy drinking coffee at cafe, but it become normal drinking it after meals. 
>>> There were a few people who enjoy drinking coffee at a cafe, but it become normal drinking after meals. 
We can easily see coffee shop anywhere and it's business has already became the most popular because it give a chance to make a lot of money. 
>>> We can easily see coffee shops anywhere and its business has already become the most popular because it gives a chance to make a lot of money. 
People willing to visit a cafe if it has a unique facility and food, even though, it's location is far from their residence.
>>> People are willing to visit a cafe if it has a unique facility and food, even though, it's location is far from their residence.
 Now, I can understand a little bit why people want to do hopping. 
>>> CORRECT
It is not a small business anymore, there are numerous well-made cafe around my country by running it personally.
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