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How do you think life would be like without the phone/telephone?

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These days we live very conveniently by using IT technology. Among them, Most people always use smartphones for convenience. Although there are a lot of functions in the smartphone, we feel convenient by using the call function basically. We can make and take a call anywhere, anytime, to anyone. Moreover, we can have a video call for free nowadays. By the way, if I live without a phone? I can¡¯t imagine life without a phone. We can¡¯t keep in touch when we¡¯re wondering about someone and something happened. In my case, I can¡¯t have a conversation with my parents in Korea. I think I feel so depressed. Especially, we¡¯re getting to have lots of time to stay home or to have a distance carefully because of COVID-19. I guess we feel inconvenient without the phone, and the world will be getting desolate.

Beth, I have a question. You gave me feedback.
'The doctor is no available at the moment.'
Do I have to the word 'no' instead 'not' in front of 'available'? (no vs not)

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Thank you for this Chloe. Keep it coming! :D

These days we live very conveniently by using IT technology. 
>>>  correct (These days, we live very conveniently by using IT technology.) 
>>> OR: These days, we live very conveniently with the help of IT technology.
Among them, Most people always use smartphones for convenience. 
>>> correct (Among them, most people always use smartphones for convenience.)  
>>> OR: Among them, the smartphone is the most utilized device.
Although there are a lot of functions in the smartphone, we feel convenient by using the call function basically. 
>>> correct  
We can make and take a call anywhere, anytime, to anyone. 
>>> correct  
Moreover, we can have a video call for free nowadays. 
>>> correct  
By the way, if I live without a phone? I can¡¯t imagine life without a phone.
>>> By the way, what if I live without a phone? I can¡¯t imagine life without a phone. 
>>> OR: Come to think of it, I can¡¯t imagine life without a phone.
We can¡¯t keep in touch when we¡¯re wondering about someone and something happened.   
>>> correct
In my case, I can¡¯t have a conversation with my parents in Korea. 
>>> correct  
I think I feel so depressed. 
>>> correct
>>> OR: I think I would feel so depressed.  
Especially, we¡¯re getting to have lots of time to stay home or to have a distance carefully because of COVID-19. 
>>> correct  
I guess we feel inconvenient without the phone, and the world will be getting desolate.
>>> I guess we feel inconvenient without the phone, and the world will get desolated.  


Beth, I have a question. You gave me feedback.
'The doctor is no available at the moment.'
Do I have to the word 'no' instead 'not' in front of 'available'? (no vs not)
>>> Oh, I'm sorry Chloe. That was a typographical error. It should be "The doctor is NOT available at the moment." I guess I missed the letter T. Thank you for pointing that out. :D
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