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essay about \"If you had travel machine, where would you go and why?\"

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If I had a travel machine, I would like to go to the Ekaterina palace, which is in Russia.
I think going to the Mars would be great! I guess I need to stay in ISS which is International Space Station.
My sister would use the travel machine to get to school in short second,(it would be nice if you get up late)
Mom likes to go Hawaii again, because its snowing! my sister thinks it's unfair that to have warm weather,nice palm trees, pineapples, and snowing weather two at a time. It sounds like it's really unfair, but to think it's horrible to have two weathers which it didn't happen before because it's a evidence that earth is getting sick! ¤Ð¤Ð
And where I would like to go if I had a time machine is just going school!
(plus, if I had a time machine, I would go back to like twenty years and tell my grandmother not to give up buying the Samsung stock
or go back to 14 years and tell my mom not to think the man who she is dating to bad, it's my dad by the way. )
·Î¾È ¼±»ý´Ô²², to teacher Roanne.

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Hi, YoonSuh! 

That's a very funny story and answer you got there. 
Thank you for answering the question. Have a great evening!

~T. Roanne ^_^ 

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If I had a travel machine, I would like to go to the Ekaterina palace, which is in Russia.
>> Correct! 
I think going to the Mars would be great!
>> Correct! or I think going to the Mars would be great, too!
I guess I need to stay in ISS which is International Space Station.
>>I guess I need to stay in ISS, which means International Space Station.
My sister would use the travel machine to get to school in short second,(it would be nice if you get up late)
>> My sister would use the travel machine to get to school in short second. It would be nice if you get up late.
Mom likes to go Hawaii again, because its snowing!
>> Correct! 
my sister thinks it's unfair that to have warm weather,nice palm trees, pineapples, and snowing weather two at a time. 
>> My sister thinks it's unfair that to have warm weather, nice palm trees, pineapples, and snowing weather two at a time. 
It sounds like it's really unfair, but to think it's horrible to have two weathers which it didn't happen before because it's a evidence that earth is getting sick! ¤Ð¤Ð
>>It sounds like it's really unfair, but to think it's horrible to have two weathers which it didn't happen before because it's an evidence that the earth is getting sick! 
And where I would like to go if I had a time machine is just going school!
>> And where I would like to go if I had a time machine, it's just going school!
(plus, if I had a time machine, I would go back to like twenty years and tell my grandmother not to give up buying the Samsung stock or go back to 14 years and tell my mom not to think the man who she is dating to bad, it's my dad by the way. )
>> Plus, if I had a time machine, I would go back to like twenty years and tell my grandmother not to give up buying the Samsung stock or go back to 14 years and tell my mom not to think the man who she is dating too bad, it's my dad by the way.
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