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Do you believe in lucky charms? Why or why not?

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As a result, I don't believe in any lucky charms.
I am interested in science, and there are many kinds of logics in it.
But the lucky charms are not according to any science parts.
The lucky charms are what people made because they need to trust, and I think believing my own religion is much better than believing the lucky charms.
So I don't believe in any luck charms, and also I don't want to.

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As a result, I don't believe in any lucky charms.
>> I don't believe in lucky charms. 

I am interested in science, and there are many kinds of logics in it.
>> I am only interested in Science where there are a lot of logics. 

But the lucky charms are not according to any science parts.
>> Lucky chams don't  have any logical explanations to it. 

The lucky charms are what people made because they need to trust, and I think believing my own religion is much better than believing the lucky charms.
>> Lucky charms are made by people for their security. I think having a religion is better than believing in luck. 

So I don't believe in any luck charms, and also I don't want to.
>>So I don't believe in any luck charms, and I also don't want to.

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