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Some people believe that teacher should be strict for students better learning and other people say

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2021-12-07 126

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Many of us believe that if teachers or parents are strict to children, it will be bright future for them. however, I don't fully agree it because we have easily seen people who have mental problem when they become adults due to strict discipline at school. My teacher frequently punished physically if students broke the school regulations. We thought that it was teacher's right and it was for students but some teacher did it as their habit or relieving their stress by beating students. It is also reported that if parents shouted at children rather than trying to explain what kind of mistake children commit, their kids don't want to be with parents and might be suffering against stress. I think all people know what the right way to discipline but even adults don't know how to control their mind, if they are high temper. However, parents and teachers must improve communication skills with students. If so, it would be helpful for their children.

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Great day Mr. Hwang! ^^ Thanks for doing your essays! It's getting colder now so keep yourself warm! Take care!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Many of us believe that if teachers or parents are strict to children, it will be bright future for them.
>>> Many of us believe that if teachers or parents are strict to children, they will have a bright future.
 however, I don't fully agree it because we have easily seen people who have mental problem when they become adults due to strict discipline at school. 
>>>  However, I don't fully agree with it because we have easily seen people who have mental problems when they become adults due to strict discipline at school. 
My teacher frequently punished physically if students broke the school regulations.
>>> My teacher frequently punished students physically which broke the school regulations.
 We thought that it was teacher's right and it was for students but some teacher did it as their habit or relieving their stress by beating students.
>>>  We thought that it was the teacher's right and it was for students but some teacher did it as their habit or relieving their stress by beating students.
 It is also reported that if parents shouted at children rather than trying to explain what kind of mistake children commit, their kids don't want to be with parents and might be suffering against stress.
>>>  It is also reported that if parents shouted at their children rather than trying to explain what kind of mistake their children have committed, their kids don't want to be with their parents and might be suffering from getting stressed.
 I think all people know what the right way to discipline but even adults don't know how to control their mind, if they are high temper. 
>>>  I think all people know what the right way to discipline is but even adults don't know how to control their mind, if they are hot tempered. 
However, parents and teachers must improve communication skills with students.
>>> However, parents and teachers must improve their communication skills with the students.
 If so, it would be helpful for their children.
>>> CORRECT
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