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Folk Story About Moon

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Theme : Write a legend or folk story that you know or have heard of about the moon.
It is a traditional fairy tale named .
In the story, there is a boy and a girl. They are brother and sister.
They live with mother. One day, the mother met a tiger while going to the house. And the tiger eats the mother.
Then, the tiger goes to the house and tries to eat the siblings but the tiger can't.
One day, the tiger tried to eat the siblings and the brother and sister go up to the tree.
But the tiger go up to the tree so they said to the god, "God, when you think we are poor, let the new string down for us."
And they went up to the sky using the string and they met their mother. And the sibling became the sun and the moon.

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Here's your corrected composition, Clair.
Have an enjoyable weekend and see you next week!

Cheers,
Jean~~


                      Theme : Write a legend or folk story that you know or have heard of about the moon.



It is a traditional fairy tale named .
>> or: I know one folk tale titled ____. 

In the story, there is a boy and a girl. They are brother and sister.
>> or: This is a story of a boy and a girl who are siblings. 

They live with mother. 
>> They live with their mother. 

One day, the mother met a tiger while going to the house. 
>> One day, the mother met a tiger on her way home. 

And the tiger eats the mother.
>> And the tiger ate the mother.

Then, the tiger goes to the house and tries to eat the siblings but the tiger can't.
>> Then, the tiger went into the house and tried to eat the siblings but it couldn't.
>> Then, the tiger went into the house and tried to eat the siblings but failed to do so. 

One day, the tiger tried to eat the siblings and the brother and sister go up to the tree.
>> On another day, the tiger tried to eat the siblings, but the brother and sister climbed up the tree.

But the tiger go up to the tree so they said to the god, "God, when you think we are poor, let the new string down for us."
>> But the tiger climbed up the tree and went after the siblings so they prayed to the god, "God, if you think we are poor, let the new string down for us."

And they went up to the sky using the string and they met their mother. And the sibling became the sun and the moon.
>> So they went up to the sky using the string and met their mother. And the siblings became the sun and the moon. 

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