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What is your favorite place in your city and why?

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For me, the around of the subway station is my favorite place in my city.
A lot of people come to the station so there are many stores and the places which can enjoy many entertainments.
And the station is near by my home, so I can go there and play with my friends.
Also it is very comfortable to buy some stuff and food from there.
So my best place in my city is the around of the sbuway station.

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Hi John:) 

A lot of my teenage students like going there as well. They usually hang-out and meet with their friends there. I wish to go there someday too. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

For me, the around of the subway station is my favorite place in my city.
>> F or me, the places around the subway station are my favorite places in my city. 

A lot of people come to the station so there are many stores and the places which can enjoy many entertainments.
>>A lot of people go to the station so there are many stores and the places where people can entertain. 

And the station is near by my home, so I can go there and play with my friends.
>> The stations is nearby my home so I can go there and play with my friends. 

Also it is very comfortable to buy some stuff and food from there.
>> It is very convenient to buy food and other things there. 

So my best place in my city is the around of the sbuway station.
>> So the best place in my city is the stores around the subway station. 
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