¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Getting older

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÀÌ*Àº
2021-12-02 162

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

I'm afraid getting old.
Because I'm not trust my self on my own future life.
My job is musical actor, freelancer I can fix it my schedule if I want but I can not get the pay normally usual.
Some season if I have very many work, I get the many money.
But some season if I don't have a work, I can't get the money.
Example, covid 19 pendemic season is very hard to me.
And every stage actor getting hard time.
That's why I afraid get old.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi Ann:) 

I think at some point, we are all afraid of getting old. There are some advantages and disadvantages to it. If we get old, we gain wisdom and experiences. The down side is that, we get weaker and weaker. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

I'm afraid getting old.
>> I'm afraid of getting old. 

Because I'm not trust my self on my own future life.
>> It's because I don't trust myself when it comes to the future. 

My job is musical actor, freelancer I can fix it my schedule if I want but I can not get the pay normally usual.
>> My job is a musical actor which is a freelancer. I am the one managing my time but I don't get payed normally like other office employees. 

Some season if I have very many work, I get the many money.
>> Some seasons, I have a lot of projects so I get a lot of money. 

But some season if I don't have a work, I can't get the money.
>> But there are also some seasons that I don't have a lot of projects so I don't get a lot of money. 

Example, covid 19 pendemic season is very hard to me.
>> For example, the pandemic season has been very hard for me. 

And every stage actor getting hard time.
>> Every stage actor had a hard time. 

That's why I afraid get old.
>>> That's why I am afraid of getting old. 
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
113726 What are your own small ways to reduce air pollution? ¼±* ¿Ï·á 2021-11-10 635
113725 Wednesday homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2021-11-10 125
113724 What would you do if most of your frieds couldn\'t make it to a... ¾ç*ºó ¿Ï·á 2021-11-10 1
113723 Today\'s homework Ȳ*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2021-11-10 122
113722 homework ÀÌ*ÈÆ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-10 1
113721 homework ÀÌ*ÈÆ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-10 2
113720 homework ÀÌ*ÈÆ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-10 1
113719 low-paying jobs ±Ç*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-10 160
113718 Are all cheap items bad in quality? ¼­*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-10 2
113717 Please describe your hometown. ye*nhi ¿Ï·á 2021-11-09 170
113716 Homework ¹é*Áø ¿Ï·á 2021-11-09 142
113715 Essay ÀÌ*°æ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-09 637
113714 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2021-11-09 0
113713 Homework ¿À*Àº ¿Ï·á 2021-11-09 128
113712 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-09 145
113711 Is technology a good or a bad thing? ±Ç*À± ¿Ï·á 2021-11-09 0
113710 HOMEWORK: Any special plans for this weekend? ¼Õ*Çü ¿Ï·á 2021-11-09 1
113709 HOMEWORK ¿À*º½ ¿Ï·á 2021-11-09 774
113708 HOMEWORK: What are the things that you need to fix? ¼Õ*Çü ¿Ï·á 2021-11-09 1
113707 HOMEWORK: Would you like to travel by car? by plane? by boat? ¼Õ*Çü ¿Ï·á 2021-11-09 1

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04