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I'm sorry , I have to cancel today class.
I came leaving one's book at home.

And I will write this correct freely.

Today Morning It was too cold and I flet sharp wind on my face.

We can see the blue sky, When blow in here North wind.
Too cold but feel so good to clean.

After few days, Wether will be worm. but I'm much better cool.

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Hi there, Ethan!

I hope that you were able to get the book that you needed. Well, it seems like your weather has gone colder day by day. So, keep warm and make sure to stay COVID-free. 

Anyway, your composition below is very good. Look over some of the suggestions I made and see how to make your sentences even better.

See you then on Friday!

-T. Donna =)

I'm sorry , I have to cancel today class.
>> I'm sorry , I have to cancel today's class.

I came leaving one's book at home.
>> Correct!

And I will write this correct freely.
>> And I will write this correctly freely.

Today Morning It was too cold and I flet sharp wind on my face.
>> This morning it was too cold and I felt a sharp wind on my face.

We can see the blue sky, When blow in here North wind.
>> We can see the blue sky when the north wind blows here.

Too cold but feel so good to clean.
>> It's too cold but it feels so good and clean.

After few days, Wether will be worm. but I'm much better cool.
>> After a few days, the weather will be warm but I'm much better with the cool one.
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