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What do you and your family usually do during Christmas?

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What do you and your family usually do during Christmas?

Our family goes to the church on Christmas.
When I was young, Christmas was a great event for me.
Nowadays, it is a just holiday.
In past time, the carol songs are playing and decorating a colorful Christmas tree in the street.
All people enjoyed the Christmas festival.
Sometimes I want to feel the same emotion that I felt Christmas season.

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Hi Monica:) 

Me too. Sometimes I feel that Christmas is the not the same as it was before. I wish there was a time machine so I can bring back those moments. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

-Teacher Elise

Our family goes to the church on Christmas.
>> Our family goes to church on Christmas. 

When I was young, Christmas was a great event for me.
>> CORRECT

Nowadays, it is a just holiday.
>> Nowadays, it is just a normal holiday.

In past time, the carol songs are playing and decorating a colorful Christmas tree in the street.
>> In past, carol songs are playing and people decorate Christmas trees on the streets, 

All people enjoyed the Christmas festival.
>> Everyone enjoyed Christmas. 

Sometimes I want to feel the same emotion that I felt Christmas season.
>> Sometimes I want to feel the same I did before about Christmas. 

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