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What are the qualities a good cop should have?

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2021-11-30 994

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First of all, He or she should have a strong mindset of serving society. Being a cop has a duty to protect people from all kinds of dangers. They cannot hesitate to help people at the risk who good cops bump into because that’s what cops do on their duty.
Second, being good cops need to be in good health because they face many difficulties, which need physical power. Though, they don’t need to become muscle people. It is good to be in shape enough to subdue violent people. It means they can use skills and powers in that situation.
Third, they are required to have field experience, so they can decide whether to use teaser guns, batons, or not. While they hesitate in emergency situations, they can be attacked by knives or lethal weapons. People can think of the case the negligence of their duties.
On top of that, we should not blame them because they are threatened to die from the situation. We need to appreciate them at all times.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good day, Sun Jung!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


First of all, He or she should have a strong mindset of serving society.
>>  First of all, he or she should have a strong mindset of serving the society.
Being a cop has a duty to protect people from all kinds of dangers.
>> A cop has a duty to protect people from all kinds of dangers.
OR >> Being a cop is not an easy task because they are meant to protect people from any sorts of danger or any physical harm.
They cannot hesitate to help people at the risk who good cops bump into because that’s what cops do on their duty.
>> CORRECT!
Second, being good cops need to be in good health because they face many difficulties, which need physical power. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >>  Second, being good cops need to be in good health because they face many difficulties, which need physical power and psychological stability. 
Though, they don’t need to become muscle people. 
>> Though, they don’t need to become too muscular. 
It is good to be in shape enough to subdue violent people. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It is good to be in shape enough to let violent people submit or surrender. 
It means they can use skills and powers in that situation.
>> CORRECT!
Third, they are required to have field experience, so they can decide whether to use teaser guns, batons, or not. 
>> CORRECT!
While they hesitate in emergency situations, they can be attacked by knives or lethal weapons.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> If they hesitate in emergency situations, the armed men could use their knives or lethal weapons with all their physical strength in manipulating that circumstance.
 People can think of the case the negligence of their duties.
>>  People can think of the case as negligence of their duties.
On top of that, we should not blame them because they are threatened to die from the situation.
>> CORRECT!
 We need to appreciate them at all times.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> We need to show respect and appreciation to them at all times.
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