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Some people believe that parents should deal with bad behavior of their children. While others says

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The law is created by law makers after longstanding debate among social members to regulate their behavior. This is the minimum rules people have to follow. If they don't keep it, there will be serious social problem that might cause social collapse. However, every situation aren't able to be involved in the law due to varieties of life. Furthermore, there is special law for adolescent which is stated that teenagers who are 10 to 14 years old can't be punished by the law because they don't construct their personalities and responsibilities yet. Our law consider as the ones who don't know what justice is yet. That's why home discipline is the important factor to shape them. A baby grow up by imitating everything their parents do from speaking to behavior, hence, parents must take a greater role in shaping their children's future regarding moral behavior. Although, most people know the importance of home discipline, it's really hard for them to follow right method due to busy life.

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The law is created by law makers after longstanding debate among social members to regulate their behavior. 
>>> The law is created by the law makers after a longstanding debate among social members to regulate their behavior. 
This is the minimum rules people have to follow. 
>>> These are the least rules people have to follow. 
If they don't keep it, there will be a serious social problem that might cause social collapse. 
>>>CORRECT
However, every situation aren't able to be involved in the law due to varieties of life. 
>>> However, every circumstance isn't able to be involved in the law due to various ways of life. 
Furthermore, there is special law for adolescent which is stated that teenagers who are 10 to 14 years old can't be punished by the law because they don't construct their personalities and responsibilities yet. 
>>> Furthermore, there is a special law for adolescent which is stated that teenagers who are 10 to 14 years old can't be punished by the law because they haven't constructed their personalities and responsibilities yet. 
Our law consider as the ones who don't know what justice is yet.
>>> Our law considers those who don't know what justice is.
 That's why home discipline is an important factor to shape them.
>>>CORRECT
 A baby grow up by imitating everything their parents do from speaking to behavior, hence, parents must take a greater role in shaping their children's future regarding moral behavior.
>>>  A baby grows up by imitating everything their parents do from speaking to their behavior, hence, parents must take a greater role in shaping their children's future regarding moral behavior.
 Although, most people know the importance of home discipline, it's really hard for them to follow the right method due to their busy life.
>>>CORRECT
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