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I want to share food like ramen to poor. Someone can say, 'Ramen is too small. It can't help that poor people.'. Yes, I agree that Ramen is very small present for us. However, in the cold Christmas, poor people want some warm food. So, though very cheap, and small food like Ramen, it can be big happiness to them. In conclusion, I'll give poor people Ramen.

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Hi, Daniel! You have delivered your ideas in an orderly way. Good job!  However, ramen is not a proper noun, so there's no need to capitalize "r." Alright? 

- Teacher Debbie


I want to share food like ramen to poor. 
>> I want to share food like ramen with the poor. 

Someone can say, 'Ramen is too small. It can't help that poor people.'. 
>> Some might say, "Ramen is too small. It can't help poor people."

Yes, I agree that Ramen is very small present for us. 
>> Yes, I agree that ramen is very small for us. 

However, in the cold Christmas, poor people want some warm food. 
>> However, on a cold Christmas Day, poor people want some warm food. 

So, though very cheap, and small food like Ramen, it can be big happiness to them.
>> Though it's very cheap and small, ramen can bring a lot of happiness to them.

 In conclusion, I'll give poor people Ramen.
>> In conclusion, I'll give poor people ramen.
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