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I think most best city in South Korea is absolutely Seoul.
Because Seoul is capital of South Korea and traffic, every service is very good to used.
Seoul's most good thing, famous is han river.
Very beautiful view and when I look at han river feel so fresh.

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Hi Ann:)

That is actually my target place when I visit South Korea. I heard so many things about it. It is indeed the highlight of South Korea. 

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I think most best city in South Korea is absolutely Seoul.
>> I think the best city in South Korea is definitely Seoul. 

Because Seoul is capital of South Korea and traffic, every service is very good to used.
>> It is because it is the capital city of South Korea. There may be heavy traffic, but the services here are really good. 

Seoul's most good thing, famous is han river.
>> The best thing about this city is the "Han River". 

Very beautiful view and when I look at han river feel so fresh.
>> It has a very beautiful view and it looks very refreshing. 
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