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Have you failed on something before?

--> Of course. I have failed in my business area. While doing my business, I did not reach the goals I had planned many times.
However, I was growing gradually through many failures, and I was able to reach my goal as I grew little by little.

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Hello there Bo Im!

A job well done here on your answer! As you can see, all of your sentences are correct and your answer is candid. What matters the most when we make our goals is to keep pushing through no matter what. Before you know it, you are already there.

See you in class for a very meaningful discussion!

-T. Donna =)

Of course. I have failed in my business area. 
>> Correct!
Or: Of course, I have failed in my business area. 

While doing my business, I did not reach the goals I had planned many times.
>> Correct!

However, I was growing gradually through many failures, and I was able to reach my goal as I grew little by little.
>> Correct!
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