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My favorite traditional Korean food is ttaeok-bok-ki.
Every Korean basically can eat some spicy food. Now these day ttaeok-bok-ki is spicy sauce base, but traditional ttaeok-bok-ki sauce base is soi sauce.
And in my opinion, traditional style ttaeok-bok-ki is sweet and salty very delicious.
And that's why I recommend ttaeok-bok-ki for foreigners.

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My favorite traditional Korean food is ttaeok-bok-ki.
>> CORRECT

Every Korean basically can eat some spicy food. 
>> Most Koreans like spicy food. 

Now these day ttaeok-bok-ki is spicy sauce base, but traditional ttaeok-bok-ki sauce base is soi sauce.
>> Tteokbokki has a spicy sauce base but traditionally, it's sauce base is soy sauce. 

And in my opinion, traditional style ttaeok-bok-ki is sweet and salty very delicious.
>> In my opinion, the traditional style is sweet and salty which makes it very delicious. 

And that's why I recommend ttaeok-bok-ki for foreigners.
>>And that's why I recommend Tteokbokki to foreigners.


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