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After I got married, I am currently living with my wife and two children without my parents. they live other city.

My wife has a strong living ability and is working hard on everything. she raised our child without any help of my parents and she is very wise. Before marriage, she had been teaching children in kindergarden for more than 8 years. she still work part-time at school. She likes to cook and also likes to drink soju.^^

My son's name is Seo-jun. He has a lot of experience in everything and is popular among friends. He is currently a class president at school and attends after school, piano, art, and English academy. There is a competition this weekend.

My daughter's name is Seo-Bin. She is feminine and very stubborn. Her face looks like me a lot. She is good with his hands and is learning broadcast dance after school. i don't look that talented. Instead, she study well.

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Hi Evan:)

You have a very interesting family. Everyone has their special personality.  Thanks for sharing :) 

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After I got married, I am currently living with my wife and two children without my parents. 
>> After I got married, I lived with my wife and two children without my parents. 

they live other city.
>> They lived in another city. 

My wife has a strong living ability and is working hard on everything. 
>>My wife has a strong living ability and she works hard on everything. 

she raised our child without any help of my parents and she is very wise. 
>> She raised our children without any help from my parents and she is very wise. 

Before marriage, she had been teaching children in kindergarden for more than 8 years. 
>> Before marriage, she had been teaching children in kindergarten for more than 8 years. 

she still work part-time at school. 
>> She still works part-time in that school. 

She likes to cook and also likes to drink soju.^^
>>
She likes to cook and drink soju.^^

My son's name is Seo-jun. 
>> CORRECT

He has a lot of experience in everything and is popular among friends. 
>> He has a lot of experience in everything and is popular among his friends. 

He is currently a class president at school and attends after school, piano, art, and English academy. 
>> He is currently the class president in his school and attends after school piano, art, and English academy. 

There is a competition this weekend.
>> CORRECT

My daughter's name is Seo-Bin.
>> CORRECT

She is feminine and very stubborn. 
>> CORRECT

Her face looks like me a lot. 
>> She looks a lot like me. 

She is good with his hands and is learning broadcast dance after school. 
>> She is good with her hands and is learning broadcast dancing after school. 

i don't look that talented. 
>> CORRECT

Instead, she study well.
>> Instead, she studies well.

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