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vaccines for 12-17 years old students.

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I think young students should have vaccines, too.
There is no perfect vaccine or treatment yet, but I don't think we should postpone it anymore.
Students are already getting vaccines in many countries, including the United States.
I don't think they should spend time without doing online classes or school life until when.
I think there's a no reason to hesitate if the government recommends vaccination.

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Hi Evan:)

I couldn't agree more. You're the first student of mine who actually agreed in terms of vaccinating children. It's actually being done here in the Philippines as well. So far, no kids are harm. I think parents should consider this for the safety of their children. 

PS: Your writing skills are rapidly improving. Keep it up! 

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I think young students should have vaccines, too.
>> CORRECT

There is no perfect vaccine or treatment yet, but I don't think we should postpone it anymore.
>> CORRECT

Students are already getting vaccines in many countries, including the United States.
>> CORRECT

I don't think they should spend time without doing online classes or school life until when.
>> I don't think they should spend time having online classes. They should get the vaccine to go back to the normal school life. 

I think there's a no reason to hesitate if the government recommends vaccination.
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