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Q:Do you think being a pilot is a good job? Why or why not?
A:I think it's good job, but I think they have a lot of responsibility.
Pilot can earn a lot of money, and they also can practice how to use airplanes.
But if airplane pilots make mistake and it become fall accident or other accidents, then it will be very serious problem, also other pilots need to be careful about making mistake, too.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think it's good job, but I think they have a lot of responsibility.

>> CORRECT!
Pilot can earn a lot of money, and they also can practice how to use airplanes.

>> Pilots can earn a lot of money and they can also practice how to fly airplanes.
But if airplane pilots make mistake and it become fall accident or other accidents, then it will be very serious problem, 

>> If pilots make a mistake and if the plane crashes, then it will be a very serious problem.

also other pilots need to be careful about making mistake, too.

>> All pilots need to be careful about making mistakes.

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