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What was the most important thing your parents ever taught you?

When I was a freshman in high school, I had a friend. We thought each other as besties, and would hang out all the time after school. However, after she moved away and was transferred to another school, the stressful time began. I would receive a call almost every night, with her sobbing, saying that her new classmates are mean. It must have been a hard time for her, but it was stressful for me as well, to answer a call, expecting it to be another one of her complaining, crying, and self-pitying. I couldn¡¯t reject her, because I pitied her too. Despite my expectation that she would stop soon, the situation repeated itself until I got into the university. One day, after hearing her scream-crying without even saying ¡°hello¡±, I finally snapped. I spoke in a cold and insensitive manner to her before blocking her phone number.
Though I have not regretted cutting her off, one thing I have regretted is not having handled the

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What was the most important thing your parents ever taught you?


When I was a freshman in high school, I had a friend. 
>> This is a good sentence. 
OR
>> When I was a high school freshman, I had a friend.

We thought each other as besties, and would hang out all the time after school.
>> We thought of each other as besties and would hang out all the time after school.

However, after she moved away and was transferred to another school, the stressful time began.
>> However, after she moved away and transferred to another school, the stressful time began. 

I would receive a call almost every night, with her sobbing, saying that her new classmates are mean.
>> I would receive a call almost every night, with her sobbing, saying that her new classmates were mean.

It must have been a hard time for her, but it was stressful for me as well, to answer a call, expecting it to be another one of her complaining, crying, and self-pitying.
>> It must have been a hard time for her, but it was stressful for me as well: to answer her call, expecting that she would be complaining, crying, and pitying herself.

I couldn¡¯t reject her, because I pitied her too.
>>  I couldn¡¯t reject her because I pitied her too. 

 Despite my expectation that she would stop soon, the situation repeated itself until I got into the university.
>> Despite my expectation that she would stop soon, the situation continued until I got into the university.

One day, after hearing her scream-crying without even saying ¡°hello¡±, I finally snapped.
>> One day, after hearing her scream-like crying without even saying ¡°hello,¡± I finally snapped.

I spoke in a cold and insensitive manner to her before blocking her phone number.
>> This is a good sentence.

Though I have not regretted cutting her off, one thing I have regretted is not having handled the situation maturely.
>> This is a good sentence.
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