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If i can spend a day with a famous person...

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If I can spend the day with a famous person, I want to meet a great soccer player.
His name is Son Heungmin and he is a Korean.
He is currently playing for Tottenham in the English Premier League.
He plays soccer very hard in a given position.
With coach or with his team, he always does his best in every game.
I want to meet him and learn why he works so hard and how to get the energy.
He is giving hope and joyful to Koreans in the European country of England.
He always smiles and is positive.
I hope we can enjoy soccer together someday. I will cheer for him.
However, most of the Premier Games are early in the morning in Korea, but I sometimes wake up to watch his game.

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Hi Evan:)

Most of my students answered with a famous soccer payer. Koreans really love soccer. There is no doubt. Hahaha!

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If I can spend the day with a famous person, I want to meet a great soccer player.
>> CORRECT

His name is Son Heungmin and he is a Korean.
>> CORRECT

He is currently playing for Tottenham in the English Premier League.
>> CORRECT

He plays soccer very hard in a given position.
>>He plays soccer very well in a given position.

With coach or with his team, he always does his best in every game.
>> When he's with his coach or team, he always does his best. 

I want to meet him and learn why he works so hard and how to get the energy.
>> I want to meet him and learn why he works so hard and I want to know how he gets the energy. 

He is giving hope and joyful to Koreans in the European country of England.
>> He is giving hope and joy to Koreans in England.

He always smiles and is positive.
>> He always smiles and stays positive.

I hope we can enjoy soccer together someday. I will cheer for him.
>> CORRECT

However, most of the Premier Games are early in the morning in Korea, but I sometimes wake up to watch his game.
>> However, most of the Premier Games are shown early in the morning in Korea, and I sometimes wake up early to watch his game.

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