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In my personal opinion the most big problem is riches there gonna be the more riches, poors there goona be the more poors.
Because our economic structure do not working rounding.
House price, the land price gonna be the more higher and higher every day.
Riches they very quickly got it because they have a lot of money and heard about something news, but just normal people we don't have any money and news.
The money circulation structure looks like I think it's becoming abnormal.

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Hi Ann:)

Our countries are experiencing different problems that affects the citizens living in it. I hope the ones that you have stated would be resolved. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In my personal opinion the most big problem is riches there gonna be the more riches, poors there goona be the more poors.
>> In my own personal opinion, i think the biggest problem our country is facing is that the rich people keep on getting rich and the poor remain poor. 

Because our economic structure do not working rounding.
>> It is because our economic structure is not working well. 

House price, the land price gonna be the more higher and higher every day.
>> House and land prices become higher everyday. 

Riches they very quickly got it because they have a lot of money and heard about something news, but just normal people we don't have any money and news.
>> Rich people can easily get it because they have a lot of money and usually know about it first. For normal people, we don't have money to afford it and we rarely get informed about it. 

The money circulation structure looks like I think it's becoming abnormal.
>>The circulation of money is not working well. 
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