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I never felt alone because my family, friends, and fellow workers were always there with me. I was happy at all. But after the wedding, I moved to the US and my life totally changed. I don¡¯t have any friends and family in this new circumstance. I discovered negative attributes of myself such as crankiness, frustration, gloominess and petrification, most of which are never found in Korea. I had no idea how I could fill the void in my life. I learned that I didn¡¯t learn who I am when cannot Put my stamp on new circumstances. One day, my husband recommended applying for being a writer on one of the biggest portal websites in Korea. Luckily, I won a writer position. As a result, more than twenty thousand people read my essays. After then, I learned that I can make lemonade out of lemons. I am a mom who is a student at the same time. My goal is to improve and communicate with my future daughter in English. I study English every night during my daughter's nap and sleeping time at night.

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You obviously are a writer because you know how to organize your thoughts and make it interesting to your readers. Thank you for being an inspiration to me, Jane! You and Han are truly blessings! Until then!-Faith-
I never felt alone because my family, friends, and fellow workers were always there with me. 
>> CORRECT
OR I never felt alone because my family, friends, and colleagues had their full support during that time.
I was happy at all. 
>> CORRECT
But after the wedding, I moved to the US and my life totally changed. 
>> CORRECT
OR But after the wedding, I moved to the US and that was one of the turning points of my life.
I don¡¯t have any friends and family in this new circumstance. 
>> I don¡¯t have any friends and family members except for my husband and daughter in this new circumstance. 
I discovered negative attributes of myself such as crankiness, frustration, gloominess and petrification, most of which are never found in Korea. 
>> I discovered negative attributes of myself such as crankiness, frustration, gloominess and petrification, most of which were never experienced in Korea. 
I had no idea how I could fill the void in my life. 
>> CORRECT
I learned that I didn¡¯t learn who I am when cannot Put my stamp on new circumstances. 
>> I realized that I wouldn¡¯t discover who I really am if I couldn't put my stamp on new circumstances. 
One day, my husband recommended applying for being a writer on one of the biggest portal websites in Korea. 
>> One day, my husband recommended that I should apply to be a writer in one of the biggest portal websites in Korea. 
Luckily, I won a writer position. 
>> Luckily, I won the writer position. 
As a result, more than twenty thousand people read my essays. 
>> CORRECT
After then, I learned that I can make lemonade out of lemons. 
>> CORRECT
I am a mom who is a student at the same time. 
>> CORRECT
OR I juggle being a mother and a student. 
My goal is to improve and communicate with my future daughter in English. 
>> My goal is to improve and communicate with my daughter in English in the future. 
I study English every night during my daughter's nap and sleeping time at night.
>> I study English during my daughter's nap and sleeping time at night.
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