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design work and abilities of construction affairs. We also hope to obtain
the practical performance of various design items at least 5 years above.
At last, they should not be have the default points for overseas travel permits.

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The design department needs to get a lot of experiences for the air-conditioning
design work and abilities of construction affairs. 
>> Correct!

We also hope to obtain
the practical performance of various design items at least 5 years above.
>> Correct!
Or: We also hope to obtain
the practical performance of various design items with at least 5 years and above.
EXPLANATION: We can insert "with" to make the flow of the sentence better. Moreover, the expression "5 years and above" may need "and" also for the same reason.

At last, they should not be have the default points for overseas travel permits.
>> At last, they should not have the default points for overseas travel permits.
EXPLANATION: There is no need for "be" for this sentence pattern. "Be" needs to be followed by "have +ing" of "having" to make the form correct. Study carefully the sentence below:

Or:  At last, they should not be having the default points for overseas travel permits.
EXPLANATION: In this way, "be+having" is the correct form. For other examples, we can have: The members must not be committing a mistake in executing the command.
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