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Nov 03 2021
Homework: What things in your life would you hate to change?

As of present, I am someone who is facing many changes. With the life slowly returning to that of before the Covid virus, I have been setting up a plan to go back to Canada once again and start pursuing what I had put off 2 years ago because of the pandemic. Therefore, I consider myself someone who is willing to face changes, albeit the concern and fear.
However, even as a person who have been actively changing many things in life, certainly there are things I would never willingly change. Among the list of things, I will be writing about the top three.
The third thing I would never change is the way I feel with animals, especially dogs. Ever since I was a little kid, I was fond of dogs. I have never understood the idea of loathing a dog, however feral or vicious it can be. With dogs always existing in my future plans, I would never change the passion I have towards them.
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Hi, Eunbee! Your work is comprehensible and well-structured.  You were able to use good expressions. However, be careful verb tense and prepositions.  

- Debbie

 
Nov. 03, 2021
Homework: What things in your life would you hate to change?


As of present, I am someone who is facing many changes. 
>> At present, I am someone who is facing many changes.

With the life slowly returning to that of before the Covid virus, I have been setting up a plan to go back to Canada once again and start pursuing what I had put off 2 years ago because of the pandemic. 
>> With life slowly returning to pre-COVID normal, I have been setting up a plan to go back to Canada once again and start pursuing what I had put off two years ago because of the pandemic. 

Therefore, I consider myself someone who is willing to face changes, albeit the concern and fear.
>> Therefore, I consider myself someone willing to face changes, albeit the concern and fear.

However, even as a person who have been actively changing many things in life, certainly there are things I would never willingly change.
>> However, even as a person who has been actively changing many things in life, certainly there are things I would never willingly change.

 Among the list of things, I will be writing about the top three.
>> This is a good sentence.

The third thing I would never change is the way I feel with animals, especially dogs. 
>> The third thing I would never change is the way I feel about animals, especially dogs.

Ever since I was a little kid, I was fond of dogs. 
>> Ever since I was a little kid, I have been fond of dogs.
 
I have never understood the idea of loathing a dog, however feral or vicious it can be. 
>> This is a good sentence.

With dogs always existing in my future plans, I would never change the passion I have towards them.
>> With dogs always existing in my plans, I would never change the passion I have towards them.


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