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What are the things we could do to protect ourselves from crime?

작성자: 이*현
2021-11-02 164

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Sometimes I had the question too, so I have search on Youtube.
I watched many video, and I introduce the way of one.
Before I watched it, I think the way of protecting crime is making sentences be higher.
But the conclusion of many researches is making catching chance be higher.
Because usual criminals don't think about sentences and punishments.
They think that police can\'t catch them when the sentence is not high.
If they know that they must be caught,they hesitate of give up to do crime.
And the video said, "Therefore, we let precriminals know all of criminals are caught. It is the reason of importance of reporting a crime and claim to be a witness."
I agree it, and I promise myself If I see anycrime although the victim is stranger, I will report or help it. I don't have to miss it.
I believe It will make noncrime country.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi there, Kang!

You really like writing essays.  It's a good way to learn English.  Keep on sharing your ideas.  But don't forget to read the corrections as well.  Take note of the right patterns and ask if you need to.  :)


-T. Maine


Sometimes I had the question too, so I have search on Youtube.

>>Sometimes, I have the question too so I have searched on YouTube for the answer.
 I watched many video, and I introduce the way of one.

>>I watched many videos and I saw one way.
 Before I watched it, I think the way of protecting crime is making sentences be higher.

>>Before I watched it, I thought the only way to protect us from crime is increasing the punishment for criminals.
 But the conclusion of many researches is making catching chance be higher.

>>But according to researches, the chance of getting a criminal caught is higher these days compared to the past.  
 Because usual criminals don't think about sentences and punishments.

>>Common criminals don't think about the sentence to be given to them in jail.
 They think that police can\'t catch them when the sentence is not high.

>>They think that police can't catch them when the sentence is not high.
 If they know that they must be caught,they hesitate of give up to do crime.

>>If they know that they will be caught, they will hesitate to do crimes.
 And the video said, "Therefore, we let precriminals know all of criminals are caught.

>>And the video said that it's going to let people know that all criminals were caught.

It is the reason of importance of reporting a crime and claim to be a witness."

>>It is also necessary to report a crime scene through witnesses.
 I agree it, and I promise myself If I see anycrime although the victim is stranger, I will report or help it. I don't have to miss it.

>>I agree with it.  I told myself that if I see any crime, I will report it or ask help from police officers.  I should not miss it.
 I believe It will make noncrime country.

>>I believe our country will become a crime-free place.


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