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Fish is good eating sources. The way to hunt it is just fishing. So, fishing is a necessary behavior. However, too much is always bad. Too much fishing can destroy ecosystem. In conclusion, we have to fishing moderately.
Diary: I'll write about "too much". Like the title, 'too much is always bad'. We have to play game moderately, not too much. Even the study, we shouldn't do it tooooooo much. So, today's proverb is "We have to do something moderately.

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Hello, Daniel!  You have answered the question appropriately.   You have delivered your ideas in an orderly way  Be careful though with articles and prepositions.

- Teacher Debbie

Fish is good eating sources.
>> Fish are a good food source.

 The way to hunt it is just fishing.
>> The way to hunt them is by fishing.

 So, fishing is a necessary behavior.
>> Therefore, fishing is necessary.

 However, too much is always bad.
>> This is a good sentence.

 Too much fishing can destroy ecosystem.
>> Too much fishing can destroy the ecosystem.

 In conclusion, we have to fishing moderately.
>>  In conclusion, we have to fish moderately.

Diary: 

I'll write about "too much".  Like the title, 'too much is always bad'. 
>> I'll write about "too much" like the title "Too much is Always Bad."

We have to play game moderately, not too much. 
>> We have to play games moderately, not too much. 

Even the study, we shouldn't do it tooooooo much. 
>> We shouldn't also study too much.

So, today's proverb is "We have to do something moderately.
>> Therefore, today's proverb is - we have to do something moderately.
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